2) The feedback that was most important to me was to be more enthusiastic which is definitely something I struggle with, especially when I am recording a video of myself. I got a lot of positive feedback about my idea which gave me more confidence that it could actually work. The most surprising feedback was that someone didn't think the Midtown bars would agree to it because they rely on getting money from IDs that they know are fake, so the whole uploading your ID thing wouldn't be practical. I did not agree with this. Especially because most bars don't charge a cover if you are over 21 so this would automatically be making them a lot more money.
3. I changed this pitch from the last one by starting off with questions that I thought would relate to most college students. I also included something at the end about getting 2 free drink vouchers when you sign up to give people more of an incentive. Overall, I tried to appeal more to my target audience and consumers.
Amy I like your idea. I think it would be a good idea to make it more efficient for the people over 21 to get in faster. I do agree that uploading your ID to any system would be risky, as it does pose a serious threat to identity theft. The only thing I can say about your pitch is that you do need to bring a little more energy to it, try not to read it off your computer. It shows that you are kind of monotone. Other than that I enjoyed watching your pitch. Please don't take offense and honestly please give me an honest critique here http://soulstosteal.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDelete-Chris
Hi Amy,
ReplyDeleteYour idea is great in the sense that it would keep people from losing their I.D.s on a night our, or in general. However, I agree that the bars in midtown would not take kindly to this. True they charge a reduced cover or none at all when you are over 21, however, they make a ton of money off of the drinks the people using fakes or other wise purchase. As for you pitch, I totally understand having trouble being enthusiastic because I too struggle with that. Overall I enjoyed your pitch!
Grace Withers
I really like this idea. While I think this is a good idea, this does leave the door open for some kind of security breach that could expose the information of anyone who puts their information the system. I agree with Chris that you did sound a little monotone but asides from that you did a great job with your pitch.
ReplyDeleteHi Amy,
ReplyDeleteI love how your idea targets college students and/or people in Gainesville in general. I always get really frustrated waiting in line when i go out on weekends. I think that this is a really novel idea, which could end up being really successful. Of course there are many things to consider but in the long run I think you could do a lot with this. I agree that you can work a little more on your enthusiasm but other than that you did a great job with presenting yourself and your idea. Good job!
Your script is great and you explain the product very well. I think the main problem is your energy and body language. Nothing about the way you're presenting gets me enticed or engaged. I'd suggest practicing making it seem more personal and conversational, with some more enthusiasm, if you really want to sell the pitch. You're idea is great though, good job!
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DeleteThe idea has merit; I would certainly recall a time when I would have paid in advance (especially if I could use that payment for multiple bars or to skip lines). I imagine this working like an express pass at a theme park really. Generally speaking well done; it can be tough to speak in front of a camera (or in public in general). That said make sure that your idea is not only a solid one but one that you are passionate about. Steve Jobs once said during a commencement speech that the only way to do truly great work is to love what you do.
ReplyDeleteI think you did great! I also get a lot of feedback about being better in front of the camera and while I understand how helpful criticism is... I still struggle with being told to be "louder" or more "active", because I had thought I was already doing so. For me it helps to not think of it like a presentation and to ignore the fact that people will be watching the video, doing so allows me to open up. I encourage you to do your best and look forward to seeing more about this idea. You did a great job describing it and are really good at encouraging others to listen to your idea. Feel free to check out my blog at http://ufclassblog.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-2.html.
ReplyDeleteYou were very detailed in your expplaination of your pitch and i think its a very creative and inventive idea. i would really be interested in this
ReplyDeleteAmy,
ReplyDeleteThis is such a different interesting idea, it’s definitely something different from what I’ve heard other students pitch about. I believe your app could actually be useful here in Gainesville I’m surprised bars haven’t come up with this idea already, considering how busy they can sometimes get on the weekends. Your speech was well thought out and you looked really professional.
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Hey Amy,
ReplyDeleteI thought your idea is extremely interesting and unique. I think that this could work, given that there are security feature in place of whatever system you were to develop or use. I think that this would allow for a much smoother night out, given that it isn;t abused or taken into the wrong hands. Anytime were dealing with drinking and ID'ing, extreme precautions need to be made as this is a very serious issue. As a bartender this would make my life a lot easier, not having to waste time at the bar to ID everyone inside, as everyone must be 21.
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